Cold Feet

Waiting to feel safe with you
You seem to be just right
Right like all the other men
Men who left me by day light

I try to hide my insecurities
Insecurities might spoil things
Things that work out for almost everyone
Everyone else wears wedding rings

You’re adorable, but I’m silent
Silent because I don’t know how to express
Express that I want you, but I’m terrified
Terrified I can’t live up to this white dress

This poem was written in response to the following two prompts:

Poetry prompt from dVerse: Write a loop poem. A loop poem follows the rhyming scheme abcb, and the last word of each line becomes the first word of the next line, and so on, throughout each stanza.

Poetry prompt from The Skeptic’s Kaddish: Write a response poem to the prompt poem. It must contain no more than 12 lines, and the word “waiting.”

The prompt poem:

‘Waiting for the dark’ by A. J. Wilson

the secret of loving you, is not to allow
that invisible flame to burn too fiercely
so only I can feel the heat,
and the flicker of longed-for pain,
you say I'm 'adorable', in a matter of fact way
looking into the mirror, combing your hair
your reflection knows the reality
which is why we feel miles apart
spinning intoxicated into oblivion
tripping over cooling embers
dancing into forgetfulness
waiting for the dark

28 Comments Add yours

  1. Ron. says:


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  2. poetisatinta says:

    Lovely piece – Thanks for taking part and showing my poem 🙏

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    1. Thank you! And thank you for your poem, too! I love what you did with the prompt 🙂


  3. Rob Kistner says:

    All you can do is go for it, if you are so inclined. But steer clear if you are uncertain it’s real.

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    1. Haha thx Rob; fortunately this one was not based on a personal experience (yet)


      1. thank goodness!


  4. Reena Saxena says:

    Your last line says it so beautifully.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Thank you Reena ❤

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  5. Grace says:

    Good work on the loop poem. Need to get over the cold feet.


    1. Thank you, Grace 🙂 Hopefully I will if and when the right person comes along haha 🙂


  6. poetisatinta says:

    Hi it has been so hard to make a decision on POW but I am so pleased to pick this poem full of deep emotion, congratulations

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    1. Thank you so much!!! I’m honored ❤

      Liked by 1 person

      1. poetisatinta says:

        Well deserved 👏


  7. hi, Sylvia!

    Mazal tov for being selected as this week’s W3 poet-of-the-week!

    could you please email me at dvdbgmlny AT gmail DOT com at your earliest convenience?

    This poem of yours (“Cold Feet”) will be our W3 “prompt poem” this week, and now we just need one or two poetry guidelines from you for others to respond to.

    Thanks so much in advance,
    David [ben Alexander]

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  8. msjadeli says:

    Sylvia, vulnerability is like kryptonite to a trauma victim. Your stream of consciousness expresses the vulnerability well, in a safe environment.

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    1. Thank you for your comment. That is the truth. Vulnerability is so powerful, but as a survivor of trauma, it becomes so much more important to know how to share it and who to share it with, etc.

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      1. msjadeli says:

        You’re very welcome, Sylvia.

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  9. hi, Sylvia!

    I just want to let you know that your W3 prompt is now live:

    Much love,

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Hi David! That’s great, thank you for letting me know! ❤

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  10. Sylvia,

    I just want to let you know that this week’s W3 is now live:

    Much love,

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Thank you, David!! ❤


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