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man walking through redwood forest with snow on ground

Tears streamed down my face as I navigated the path behind him, hiking to the sound of nothing but our boots crunching the ice-crusted snow.

Gazing from a redwood branch to a sprig of snow plant, I wondered how it could be possible to feel so depressed while surrounded by such stunning scenery.

Before we had left the apartment that morning, he had asked me to put on some makeup.

I explained that I had left it off on purpose, because makeup attracts mosquitoes, but he replied, “I’m sorry, you just don’t look as good without it.”

The moment that he stopped and spun around to smile at me, audaciously unbothered by the last hour of silence, was the moment that I knew that I had to leave him for good.

Ever since then, I’ve tried not to let potential partners see me with makeup on until after we’ve already been dating for some time.

alpine lake valley covered in ice-crusted snow

Written for Six Sentence Story Thursday by Girlie on the Edge

and for

Twiglet #290: Ice-crusted snow.

From The Twiglets: “What’s a Twiglet? A Twiglet is a short phrase. Or a word. Maybe two. Its aim is to “prompt” a flow. A thought. A memory. If something comes to mind, write. A polished piece isn’t the goal; creativity is. Poetry. Prose. Short lines. Whatever you create is a success.”

Photo credits: Unsplash

18 Comments Add yours

  1. Sadje says:

    Moving and so realistic

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    1. Thank you, Sadje ❤ This one was very realistic for me– it's heavily based on a true story.

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome! Most of our moving experiences usually are.

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  2. clark says:

    Well done (and Welcome to Sixville)

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    1. Thank you, Clark 🙂

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  3. Frank Hubeny says:

    You provided a couple good reasons not to wear makeup in your story: mosquitoes and boyfriends. Well told.

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    1. Thank you, Frank. This is why I’m single now… so that nobody complains if I don’t wear makeup. Haha, just kidding 🙂

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  4. Marsha says:

    Wow, what a traumatic comment for a man to make to a woman. That person deserved to be left! I hope he understood why she decided to leave him.

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    1. He was not the understanding type, but she was the type to try to move on and get better on her own, anyway. She would eventually learn that he would never understand– that his legacy was to treat women badly and never understand them. Good thing she got away from him. ❤

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      1. Marsha says:

        Exactly. Great story.

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  5. A story of contrast – anguish amidst the beauty of nature and 2 people living 2 different realities.
    In my imagination, your MC leaves him right there in the middle of the wilderness! (yes, and drives off without him!)

    Welcome to Six Sentence Stories!
    Thank you for the follow 😊

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    1. Haha, she should have left him in the wilderness. I like that ending much better, too! Thank you! Thanks again for the prompt ❤

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  6. Inevitability has a way of finding opportunities to come to fruition. 😉 Well crafted.

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    1. Thank you, Doug!

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  7. If he doesn’t like you as you are, he doesn’t like you.

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  8. Liz H says:

    Well done to set the story in the middle of naturally beautiful, unadorned Nature. And a clever lesson learned from his “careless” words.

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    1. Thank you, Liz ❤

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