Mountain Bluebird

Born
Outdoors
Never caged
Mountain bluebirds
Overhear children wishing they could fly

From a low branch in a giant oak tree
One turns his head
Cautiously
Watching
Us

Once
The kids
Run away
He sings sweetly
Reminding me how it feels to be free

Mountain bluebird perched on an oak tree near a bird box at University of California, Davis, Arboretum

Written for W3 Prompt #34: Wea’ve Written Weekly by The Skeptic’s Kaddish, in response to Dream Seeds by D. Avery

Form: Tetractys

From Shadow Poetry:

Tetractys, a poetic form invented by Ray Stebbing, consists of at least 5 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 10 syllables (total of 20). Tetractys can be written with more than one verse, but must follow suit with an inverted syllable count. Tetractys can also bereversed and written 10, 4, 3, 2, 1.

Double Tetractys: 1, 2, 3, 4, 10, 10, 4, 3, 2, 1

Triple Tetractys: 1, 2, 3, 4, 10, 10, 4, 3, 2, 1, 1, 2, 3, 4, 10

and so on.

“Euclid, the mathematician of classical times, considered the number series 1, 2, 3, 4 to have mystical significance because its sum is 10, so he dignified it with a name of its own – Tetractys. The tetractys could be Britain’s answer to the haiku. Its challenge is to express a complete thought, profound or comic, witty or wise, within the narrow compass of twenty syllables.” – Ray Stebbing

25 Comments Add yours

  1. Marsha says:

    Wow, this is impressive. 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Thank you so much, Marsha ❤

      Liked by 1 person

      1. Marsha says:

        You are welcome. 🙂

        Liked by 1 person

  2. Destiny says:

    Delightful read 🤍

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Thank you, Destiny ❤

      Like

      1. Destiny says:

        Pleasures…

        Liked by 1 person

  3. Your flow is remarkable, cognacproject. There isn’t any awkwardness to the tempo, despite the constraints of the form.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Thank you, Tanmay ❤ ❤ ❤

      Liked by 1 person

  4. poetisatinta says:

    I absolutely love this and the story within the poem ❤

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Thank you ❤ ❤ ❤

      Liked by 1 person

    1. Thank you 🙂

      Like

  5. That’s a very fine triple tetractys! I love the wise bird throughout.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Thank you ❤ =D

      Liked by 1 person

  6. truly lovely, Sylvia ❤

    ~David

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Thank you David ❤ =D

      Like

  7. this was a very touching poem!đź’“

    Liked by 1 person

  8. This flows so smoothly– nicely done!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. thank you so much ❤

      Liked by 1 person

  9. murisopsis says:

    Nice image of the bird and song!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Thank you, Murisopsis ❤

      Like

  10. Hi, Sylvia đź’–

    Just wanna let you know that this week’s W3, hosted by the lovely Paula Light, is now live:

    W3 Prompt #35: Wea’ve Written Weekly

    Enjoy!

    ~David

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Thanks for letting me know– I’m taking a look right now =D

      Liked by 1 person

Leave a comment